Triolet for Onestop Poetry
It's been a busy day indeed...Monday's always are as we strive to control the amount of paperwork that comes into the office after a busy weekend. So with another deal in the works, and the cold providing me with somewhat of a reprieve from its abuse, I have attempted, yet again, the intimidating Triolet form, that Shan is once again hosting over at Onestop. Should prove interesting, and as always, comments and critiques are most welcome...
Ripples
Upon rich silken sheets my love does lie
Against the twilight of deep molten rain
Where my spirit finds the soul to fly
Upon rich silken sheets my love does lie
Wrapped tight in Love's sweet lullaby
Like moth is drawn to candle's flame
Upon rich silken sheets my love does lie
Against the twilight of deep molten rain
~Natasha Head~
Comments
As lies and lies could go either way like my hat
I like the pic you used for this one
Just added to how well it was done
So do you lie
In the sky
Or are you a liar
With a flat tire
That should clear it up once and for all
So answer my rhyming call..lol
See I am found
But now bed ward bound
A great one Triolet and I enjoyed it very much. recently I guess thanks to Shan, I am reading lots of triolet and its increasing my interest in the form to an extent that there is a desire to write one.. may be I will do that shortly... yours was the last push towards this.. its so beautiful.
Thanks for sharing.
ॐ शांति ॐ
Om Shanti Om
May peace be... pray for People of Japan
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http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/2011/03/whispers-love-and-insignificance.html
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