Meeting The Bar ~ Open

Recurring host and amazing author, Victoria C. Slotto is returning to dVerse and Meeting The Bar for a wonderful article on Imagism, and I am so very pleased to be able to take part!  Poets, it's time to pick up your pens and take a stab at this unique form of poetry.

Open

It starts the day
dim, but easily viewed
dictates the crowds
during busier days
draws them in
during slower ones

Hot pink
electric blue
no glow in sunlight
but when darkness
comes early
on a late January evening
it is the light that settles
upon my desk

that tells me it is almost time
to unplug that hated sign.




Comments

Claudia said…
smiles..so unplugging it means you can go home to your fam...i think you wouldn't even need a shiny sign as you're sparkling yourself..smiles
The Silver Fox said…
Yeah, I know the feeling.
Daydreamertoo said…
Gping home time, nothing better. :)
Laurie Kolp said…
... but the writing life never closes, does it?

http://lkkolp.wordpress.com/2012/01/19/the-rubber-band/
Brian Miller said…
oy..remember those days...when i worked an office and quitting time looked so good...there are days i sneak a peak at my sell to see how much longer i got...
Raivenne said…
So grinning in appreciation here. The last four lines are the kicker. Excellent seeing the sign from the owners point of view. Much enjoyed.
Pat Hatt said…
God you know I know this feeling, I sit there reeling until the dreaded sign can be turned off..haha
Time to go home... or to happy hour. Nice one!

http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2012/01/19/black-words/
ayala said…
I know this feeling :) Nice!
Ginny Brannan said…
Not only great description of sign, but of all the feelings it invokes! Well written, Tash!!
Unknown said…
Nice job Tash, the neon inside is oh so proud right now it's blushing, but then again it is dark outside…Great piece, loved it. thanks
Anonymous said…
Oh yes... can understand this one! Great write!
Unknown said…
You capture its meaning precisely, before telling us how much it annoys you! You had me going, thinking you liked it. :-)
Dave King said…
There's a brightness about this that doesn't just come from the sign.
Anonymous said…
Ha! First agree with David above. But very funny poem. (The sign reminds me of one used as plot device in a wonderful Terry Pratchett Book, Guards Guards.) I also thought it an interesting exercise in that it forces one to pare down a little and look around more.

Thanks also for the mention on Twitter, Tash. That is very kind of you. K.
Anonymous said…
This is one of those poems that draws you in with brilliant images, leads you down a path and then Boom! Makes you stop and laugh out loud. Unexpected, delightful, humanly sightful and honest. Love it.
Victoria said…
Ah, this is so fun, Sheila. I liked how little-by-little I was able to figure out where you were going with this and yet, still at the end, I got a little surprise. Nice job with the prompt.
Fireblossom said…
*comes rushing up to the door one minute late* plzzzzz!

That sign is a friend or a killjoy, depending which side of it you are on, and in what capacity, yeah?
hedgewitch said…
Great image painting here, Natasha--you really do nail it, both visually, and in the reaction it provokes. I can see the damn thing flickering, inviting people to come in and drive you crazy. ;_)
Great storytelling here. Thanks.
Anonymous said…
Love this:

"Hot pink
electric blue
no glow in sunlight"

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