We Were Once Strangers ~ OpenLinkNight
We were once strangers
Our bodies foreign
Our dreams all that
mattered
We were once strangers
Our stories yet shared
Our hopes presented
In fancy crystal
Upon a perfectly set table
Dressed to impress
Has become dressed to get
by
As we come to know the
other
As we come to know the lies
We were once lovers
Insatiable longings
Unmatched desire
We were once lovers
Pulse racing, irrational wanting
Copulating on the sly
In closets and alleys
Magnets attracted
Drunk on adrenalin
But no more as fear
Steals energy, dreams
The strength to care
At one time we mattered
At one time the world
warped
Based on our wishes
At one time we mattered
All it took was a dream
And the powers that be
Told us we could achieve
And helped us find our way
As our story, our life
Unfolded out into the land
Of prosperity, of freedom
Where we could be all we
could be.
At one time…
…we mattered.
Comments
Like the story like feel that you went through
From strangers to all knowing to poof don't matter
Not pleasant when ending up at the later
But great write indeed
Once more at your feed
K.
Steals energy, dreams
The strength to care"
Ain't that the truth!
my offering:
http://magicinthebackyard.wordpress.com/2012/01/17/we-make-love/
@AudreyHowitt
At one time…
…we mattered....
sad but beautifully written.
At one time the world warped
Based on our wishes'
I know this memory, this feeling, this 'longing!' I love how the repetition pulses in this, carries us through. Incredible write, and a pleasure to read.
it says volumes about human nature,
about nature itself. If we have steak
and lobster daily, one day we find
ourselves craving peanut butter
and saltine crackers. Hormones can
only take us so far; they have no real
half life, and the real journey must
be done together, two marching as
one organism, still having fun regardless
of the listless ardor. Yet it seems we of
the regular-folk brigade tend to work
through, or endeavor to, our issues, our
problems. Divorce is seldom the answer.
Rebirth of friendship, the great emotional
fuel that love becomes, indefatigable.
See what happens when a poem makes
you crazy?
Great voice here ~
Snot referred me to the site.
We were once strangers reminded me of a old broken music box that you found in the attic and was remembering the first time you laid eyes on it.
Inspiring. I have my work cut out for me.
Let that silvern light keep on a shinin'
Roger ☺
my favorite was:
"But no more as fear
Steals energy, dreams
The strength to care"
I generally don't like the endings to poetry but your ending here is immaculately powerful!
At one time…
…we mattered.
Bravo!
- Asketes
I enjoyed reading your heartfelt cry... yes we in the end matter, its just so that we need to know if we matter to each other... Loved your lines...
'At one time we mattered
At one time the world warped
Based on our wishes'
Very interesting thought...
Yes I will vote for the Shorty Awards... I remember last year it was one stop poetry that got one... :-)
Shashi
ॐ नमः शिवाय
Om Namah Shivaya
http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/2012/01/whispers-haiku-on-how-i-write-poetry.html#comment-form
At twitter @VerseEveryDay
So direct and compelling...a fine, intelligent (and so poetic) take on the transformations we endure. With that neat commentary at the end that takes it from the personal to the general. Very nicely done.
"Dressed to impress
Has become dressed to get by"
"In fancy crystal
Upon a perfectly set table
Dressed to impress"
and
"Magnets attracted
Drunk on adrenalin".
Another great poem, Natasha.
Much love,
Bradley