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Escape ~ #FormForAll @dVersePoets

Let's steal the sun
take and run far
away. Come now
Somehow, with me.
Mistakes are made
to fade and die
Best laid plans slip
start to drip, fly
soar high beyond
dark skies to when
we again start
This heart has bled
almost dead, but
has been led to
only you, always you
choices few, fate
will do. Let's run.

Gay and special guest Raivenne have brought the form of Than-Bauks to the pub for FormForAll.  It's no secret I dread these little weaves, and I falter when it comes to form...but what the hell...comfort zone...blown. Come play!
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Claudia said…
oh nice..love the image of stealing the sun...wild and passionate miss tash..and the best laid plans are not those that work out best anyway...so...smiles
November 9, 2012 at 10:56 AM
Jeff said…
I enjoyed this, very good work! Yes, let's run.
November 9, 2012 at 10:58 AM
Anonymous said…
i have to admit, at the end, a dreamy sigh might have escaped my lips. beautifully done, you make it look so easy.
November 9, 2012 at 11:40 AM
Unknown said…
You do make it look effortless, like you were born to it. Passion abounds, life is for the living, run!
November 9, 2012 at 12:05 PM
Tigerbrite said…
I really enjoyed this poem. So beautifully done.
November 9, 2012 at 12:28 PM
Hot Rod Pics said…
I love this one too much. It describes exactly how I feel here, and what I'd love to do. I've thrown a pack on my back more than once and hitch hiked off to make a new life somewhere for a little while. It's always very hard, I can't sugarcoat that part, but the feeling of freedom is completely exhilarating. This poem very effectively taps that emotion in me. Very well done, Poet.
November 9, 2012 at 1:49 PM
Brian Miller said…
nice...run on poet, also steal the sun...that would be quite the fete...even when some of our plans never work out...really nicely done to form ...
November 9, 2012 at 2:47 PM
Anonymous said…
"Let's steal the sun
take and run far"

Considering the weather we've had here in New York City these past couple of weeks - Oh if only we could! I like the feel of this of this write. It transcends the breaking of the form.
November 9, 2012 at 4:03 PM
jane hewey said…
you stretched this form impressively far. I like what another commenter said about "a dreamy sigh" That is it exactly. very nicely done.
November 9, 2012 at 4:15 PM
Gene said…
The message comes through the form, which is what matters :)
Gene
November 9, 2012 at 4:57 PM
RMP said…
ahhh...escape sounds like a good idea to me. I love the idea of "mistakes are made to fade and die."
November 9, 2012 at 7:18 PM
Sabio Lantz said…
Ouch, I was watching the rhyme and frustrated because I didn't see it. But then your poem told me you had no intent to follow the exercise. But I still had fun.
Thanx
November 9, 2012 at 8:48 PM
Unknown said…
wicked fun flow here tash, very nicely spun. Love your Than Bauk here. Thanks
November 11, 2012 at 3:34 AM
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