First Names ~ #Poetry by @Tashtoo



You would have caught her
top of the tracks
train rolling by
wind in her hair
fumes on her mind

You would have caught him
dangling
hanging
laughing louder
than the train that rattled their teeth

Drunk on life
stoned on gas
pay no mind
as the numbness
takes over

Spray paint disaster
no one had dared
citizens on patrol
roll
with their flashlights

We run through the night
dodging headlights
snapping the necks of the woodland creatures
collateral damage

back of cruiser
tripped over own feet
though they looked much bigger

it was all worth it
now
years later
a testament to the first can
the first names
still stand


You don't get much call for graffiti in little towns like mine...unless your willing to make it yourself. Throwing this up for Meeting the Bar over at dVersePoets where Anna (aka @Chromatopia_LLC) has taken the stage.

Comments

Brian Miller said…
is your name on there? i embiggened it to find you but couldnt...smiles...so you dropped a tag in your day tash? its def a rush of adrenaline, especially when you almost get caught...ha...
hyperCRYPTICal said…
The excitement of the chase after leaving your tag - the adrenaline rush to beat all adrenaline rushes.

Well portrayed in words - did you then, did you?

Anna :o]
Anonymous said…
makes me wonder if those initials on that trestle can still be seen in my old hometown. Really liked this! K
Kathy B. said…
the ambiguity of "first names" stuck with me, i.e., at 1st I didn't read it as their being the 1st names on the wall but as a pair of people whose surnames may have changed, which set me wondering how much of a couple they were.
Wolfsrosebud said…
never had the heart to leave my mark anywhere... 'cept maybe a smile... thanks for the ride
this was a great poem...my friend and i tagged...kissing bandit
thanks
Anonymous said…
So many names on railway bridges that go over highways and never a face to go with them. Well written.
Unknown said…
I always enjoy how you paint a scene vividly, putting me inside the experience. Great to see you at the prompt!
Kathy Reed said…
I could feel the danger in this...cool poem!
Anonymous said…
nice poem, there's not a great deal of graffiti where I live either, I had to think of the train rides into the city. When I lived in the bush, there was a small hill, with large rocks on the side of the road, with graffiti much like you're bridge. This poem reminded me of it. I often wondered why they would drive so far out of town to graffiti.
Laurie Kolp said…
You always have such a way of engaging the reader with the very first few words... this is great, Tash.
Unknown said…
Always a strong ending (what I always look for) a punch heh. I can hear the adrenaline in your words
lucychili said…
adrenalin and adventure
sharing daring
great poem
Susan Daniels said…
Yes, Tash--you were there and proved it ;)
Susie Clevenger said…
Graffiti memories...I didn't do any graffiti, but I filled a fountain or two full of soap...lol
Abruvanamedsly said…
Excellent story you weaved around that image.
DandKblog said…
I was totally sucked into the story the images everything. Love it!
brudberg said…
This is a story well told. With just enough word, almost fiction to some extent
vivinfrance said…
You make it all very exciting.
Whether fiction or autobiography - and to me it seems deliberately ambiguous - you caught me up in the experience. :)
Anonymous said…
From the rush of an idea to the rush of paint, the rush of adrenaline to the rush of escape - what a wonderful series of images you have created, whether literally or not :-)
Unknown said…
The shift in person/perspective works to lead the reader to look at her more deeply, understand her motives, life, past present. Nicely.

http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2013/02/22/it-is-written-vehicles-of-the-word/
Anonymous said…
BAM!!! Always left with an after taste of wanting more when I read you ♥

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