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Guilty ~ #poetry @Tashtoo



Guilty

Splintered
Shifted
Bleeding
Dry

Coldness
Bruising
Alone
I cry

Stinging
Scorching
No air
To breathe

Twisted
Bent
Forced to
My knees

Begging
Pleading
Soiled
Filthy

Excuses
All gone
Left standing
Guilty

2006 Natasha Head

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Anonymous saidā€¦
While initially I started associating the meaning with kink, S&M, etc., I decidedly felt sinful and in need of redemption after finishing the last line. Good work.
February 3, 2011 at 10:35ā€ÆAM
Vivek saidā€¦
Hi,

Nice one , how is the weather there , looks like its too cold.

Wish it gets fine.

Take care.
February 3, 2011 at 1:24ā€ÆPM
Angel saidā€¦
Love it!! .. Simply put yet drowning in so much meaning .. very nice

Angel
June 9, 2011 at 4:57ā€ÆPM
Beachanny saidā€¦
Tortured and tortuous - the anguish we put ourselves through is worse than what other do to us. Well done, Gay
June 13, 2011 at 1:04ā€ÆPM
hedgewitch saidā€¦
Reminds me of the Casey Anthony trial. There's certainly enough sin to go around there, and precious little redemption. Enjoyed it.
June 13, 2011 at 2:19ā€ÆPM
Sean Vessey saidā€¦
Guilty, guilty, guilty as Doonesberry would say!I enjoyed your poem. Thank you for sharing it.
June 13, 2011 at 4:24ā€ÆPM
Anonymous saidā€¦
Redemption is a long time coming, I find myself lost in this poem thinking what on earth you've done to feel this lowly. Great emotional writing again Tash, few words required, but the rights one duly placed ;)
June 13, 2011 at 5:21ā€ÆPM
Unknown saidā€¦
Your verse is truly defined here Natasha! Really dig the flow, tempo and words in this piece ~ Rose
June 13, 2011 at 10:50ā€ÆPM
Uneven Stephen saidā€¦
I like it! I love the brevity/short lines. I definitely need to take a journey through your archives... :)
September 22, 2011 at 7:33ā€ÆPM
Unknown saidā€¦
This is different than anything I've read of yours, and it just shows how talented you are because I love this, too! Really powerful.
September 22, 2011 at 7:58ā€ÆPM
Claudia saidā€¦
guilt is something that we can't easily shake off...maybe it is one of the most difficult thing to forgive ourselves..intense choice of words here tash.. stings...
December 27, 2012 at 4:19ā€ÆPM
Unknown saidā€¦
Amazingly potent, showing off the power of brevity and diction. A great choice for the prompt. So glad you joined us, I've really missed you and the pub :)!
December 27, 2012 at 4:25ā€ÆPM
Ben Ditty saidā€¦
I liked the rhymes! :-)
December 27, 2012 at 4:26ā€ÆPM
Brian Miller saidā€¦
how did i miss this before? i usually hit all of yours....this has a nice thumping beat to it...the clipped lines...arent we all guilty in some sense and in need of redemption?
December 27, 2012 at 4:32ā€ÆPM
Laurie Kolp saidā€¦
I'm glad you shared this one again... not sure how I missed it the first time.
December 27, 2012 at 4:39ā€ÆPM
Mary saidā€¦
Guilt doesn't let a person go easily! A strong one.
December 27, 2012 at 5:05ā€ÆPM
Susan Daniels saidā€¦
Powerful in its simplicity, direct and vivid. I felt guilty reading it.
December 27, 2012 at 5:18ā€ÆPM
Kate Solo saidā€¦
Nice!! And slightly creepy!! Loved it!! :-)
December 27, 2012 at 6:31ā€ÆPM
Anonymous saidā€¦
very powerful, tash.
every word is like a slap in the face, makes me cringe.
great work. simple and strong.
December 27, 2012 at 6:33ā€ÆPM
marousia saidā€¦
Love the minimalism
December 27, 2012 at 7:42ā€ÆPM
Sabio Lantz saidā€¦
Damn, it don't get worse than that -- well drawn pain.
December 27, 2012 at 7:48ā€ÆPM
Wolfsrosebud saidā€¦
intense expression of this feeling... power to your piece
December 27, 2012 at 8:03ā€ÆPM
Anonymous saidā€¦
Very strong, scary too... guilt holds for a very long time. Powerful poem.
December 27, 2012 at 9:23ā€ÆPM
kelvin s.m. saidā€¦
...some consistent diction plays here as the reading goes more and more intense up to the very last drop...

smiles...
December 28, 2012 at 4:09ā€ÆAM
Uneven Stephen saidā€¦
Love the brevity here, Natasha. Cool take on the prompt. At first I sensed the suffering brought on by the outside world, but that last stanza drives home the point of we being the ones who bring about our own torment, and the one who can ultimately do something about it. Well done!
December 28, 2012 at 5:16ā€ÆAM
jasminecalyx saidā€¦
Your first stanza is my favorite. I see this all taking place internally. But I love the shift in imagery from being on your knees to standing, yet still feeling guilty. Standing up suggests pride and self-worth while kneeling suggests defeat, being controlled, or prayer. I think you've been trying to convince yourself that you're not guilty, but by the end you can't deny it anymore.
December 28, 2012 at 9:11ā€ÆPM
my heart's love songs saidā€¦
ooooh! i really love this, Natasha! pared down to the essence, the impact is even stronger, i think. fabulous!

Happy New Year!

dani
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December 29, 2012 at 12:06ā€ÆAM
Unknown saidā€¦
This is intense. Amazing way with words as usual
December 30, 2012 at 12:06ā€ÆAM
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