Silver Coins Upon My Eyes ~ dVerse ~ Poetics

When I came upon the Poetics prompt at dVersePoets this week, my mind automatically thought of this piece.  Joy (aka @hedge_witch) is talking about repetition in poetry, and it's something I often find myself relying upon.  I was just getting underway with poetry blogging, and had recently discovered One Stop Poetry when I wrote this, inspired by a photo by @ChasingTao.

This weeks One Shoot Sunday at One Stop Poetry brings us the stunning photography of Roger Allen Baut. His work is alive and amazing, and this weeks picture prompt is a stunning example of how he allows your imagination to simply run away with itself.  Thanks to Roger and Onestop for providing me the inspiration for the following piece:

Silver Coins Upon My Eyes


Roger Allen Baut Photo

Will these tokens pave my way
Through demon fire and yesterday
Towards the current
where old souls cry
And beyond the thunder
Of the mount most high
These silver coins upon my eyes

Silver molten seeping in
Yet icy cold upon this skin
Truth hides behind this fearsome pallor
As death waits for us all, our taking hours
Where mother's cry, the white dove does fly
These silver coins upon my eyes

Now no seeing I ride along
This river does sing a fiery song
Melting cool over dying flesh
Burdened by prayers upon my breast
A single tear slips from behind
These silver coins upon my eyes

Tokens for what waits for me
To buy my way past destiny
To seal my fate, release the me
From this wheel of suffering
To be born, one must surely die
With these silver coins upon my eyes.
~Natasha Head~

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Comments

Duane Carter saidā€¦
WOW! Natasha this is excellent! Thanks for sharing!
Anonymous saidā€¦
Oh I love this! Much different than the others!
Unknown saidā€¦
truly haunting and dark refrain.this also tells of a life yet to be fulfilled...to be borne one must surely die.excellent.
Anonymous saidā€¦
You took me into the poem and I wanted to be there holding your hand. You write with a realism and a narrative in your poetry which is quite rare. Loved it Tash x
Steve Isaak saidā€¦
Vivid, multi-sensory work.
Anonymous saidā€¦
Beautiful language leads the way here, but I'm most struck by is the deft way you've woven remembrance and expectation together and traveled with them through the demon fire and over the mount most high to essenial places of questioning, fear, faith, and hope, allowing the reader to feel all of them as they travel with you. Even better, despite those lofty points, it's both an immediate and emotional ride which gives it power an potency. Damn good poetry!
rhymetime(aka Pat) saidā€¦
I guess this is why you are so slow
As you are constantly on the go
Plus coming up with posts this good
The cat never could
You'll have that book before you know it
Then I'll go on about it in a rhyming fit!
Helena White saidā€¦
Applause! Wonderful! Smiles!

ā™„ ą®† ~.^
Brian Miller saidā€¦
nice...this is a very cool write tash...we do all die..and better we have the coin than to face charon and not...i for one am not afraid of that day...but hope it takes its time in getting here...
Uneven Stephen saidā€¦
LOVE it! Such powerful, beautiful imagery.
Chasing Tao saidā€¦
Wow Natasha! I felt like I was reading something from the ancient Greek writers...silver (coins) for the ferryman (and eyes) to take us across the river Styx to our next port of call! Love it, and am so pleased the image inspired you thus! Roger ā˜ŗ
hedgewitch saidā€¦
I remember this picture--it's gorgeous, like everything I've ever seen by Roger, and your poem picks up the silver wave in the photo and carries it ebbing and flowing with each stanza. I love the mood, the timeless feel, and the various individual lines that create it--especially like the opening lines of each stanza--first and last are killers.
Claudia saidā€¦
aww tash - this brought back some sweet OSP memories...and one or two tears... great poem..wonderful artistic approach on death..great image with the silver coins on the eyes...hope i have them ready by the time i get there
Anonymous saidā€¦
buying our destiny is a scary thought, but i guess that's the way it is in life. :(
Anonymous saidā€¦
Very haunting, sad and beautiful at the same time. Your repeating line couldn't be more perfect.

Beth
Brian Miller saidā€¦
nice...i remember this one as well my friend...charon has stillnot come for my coins, thankfully...still wont mind when he does...life is full...
Patricia saidā€¦
I loved the last stanza... this is so beautifully written.
Ed Pilolla saidā€¦
vivid, alive.
melting cool over dying flesh was the crown jewel for me.
Mary saidā€¦
Very beautiful write. Repetition definition works here.
Anonymous saidā€¦
Wow, Tash, I loved it - maybe a new favorite, exquisite and marvelous, I'll be coming back to it (bookmarked it). I tried commenting on your dragon, witch, child post from earlier and couldn't so excuse I'm going to add that comment here: Yes all three stepping forward and receding, knowing which to put forward in the world and when, are issues we all have to struggle with. Also, who to trust intimately, to reveal the multiplicity of self to and know you won't be labeled as one aspect of your being. Swirling depths in this one, thank you.
Anonymous saidā€¦
I love this... definitely one of my favorites. I especially like the last stanza.

~laurie
Arron Shilling saidā€¦
This is great tash - really stand out - love the coins - superb
Anonymous saidā€¦
To buy my way past destiny--what a great line. Lovely lyrical poem
Mark Kerstetter saidā€¦
Reads like song lyrics - Johnny Cash, maybe? You feel for this person (I see a guy), hoping those coins will be enough to buy his way.
Anonymous saidā€¦
Vivid strong images - love this!
Ann LeFlore saidā€¦
This is excellent and especially the silver molten seeping. Such a great job and I love it so much
http://gatelesspassage.com/2011/09/24/loneliness-the-anger-of-lost-hope/
Scarlet saidā€¦
"These silver coins upon my eyes"

Strong use of repeating line...lovely share Tash ~
ayala saidā€¦
I love this...excellent poem!
Fireblossom saidā€¦
My hat is off to you. I remember this prompt and my basic reaction was wtf? But you created something marvelous from it.
Anonymous saidā€¦
Dramatic tone to your words
Unknown saidā€¦
Beautiful ....thank you x
Reflections saidā€¦
Stunning piece on the linking of our lives with those times when it will end.
Steve King saidā€¦
Great refrain...nice rhythm, draws one into your imagination's subject. Very nicely drawn images and mythic allusions. This resonates.

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