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Shadorma ~ Form Monday at One Stop Poetry

Class is in session once again at One Stop Poetry.  This weeks Form Monday brings us the Shadorma Form.  Please enjoy my attempts...

Enlightenment

Though the din
Silver ~ Air bender
Water ~ Witch
Earth ~ Wizard
Purifying Fire burns
Elements winning

***

Power On
Energy surging
Mind opens
In silence
Third eye ever seeing more
Connecting to source

***

Peace comes now
Clarity is here
Awaken
Embrace self
Divinity Manifests
Miracles happenļ»æ


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Joe Hesch saidā€¦
Lovely work, Natasha. These touch on so many of your favorite themes. And yes, miracles do happen.
April 11, 2011 at 1:25ā€ÆPM
Brian Miller saidā€¦
nice. i really like the last one...i still believe in miracles....the first totally took me to Naruto...smiles.
April 11, 2011 at 2:16ā€ÆPM
Beachanny saidā€¦
Beautiful Natasha. Well written. (Look at the Purifying line...I got 6 but I didn't check the dictionary.) I love the intensity here and the way you condense your themes.
April 11, 2011 at 2:28ā€ÆPM
Louise saidā€¦
Very nice ~ especially liked 'elements winning' & 'divinity manifests' ~ for me a feast! Thank you :)
April 11, 2011 at 3:17ā€ÆPM
Reflections saidā€¦
All wonderful attempts well done. Love the feel of the last piece especially.
April 11, 2011 at 3:21ā€ÆPM
Sheila saidā€¦
love them each individually but the progression from one to the other was outstanding and impressive and the message even better! My favs from today's shadorma challenge.
April 11, 2011 at 4:41ā€ÆPM
Pat Hatt saidā€¦
the first part made me think of the pokemon games..haha..soooo sad I know. i like how you captured the feelings you were conveying with just a few short words, nice job.
April 11, 2011 at 5:05ā€ÆPM
hedgewitch saidā€¦
I'm getting a seven count on the purifying line(giving fire two syllables--Gay may be pronouncing it in one, Texas style. ;_) )--which is a great one, and how could I not like that whole witchy theme? As others have said, an effective progression here as well. Nice work.
April 11, 2011 at 5:10ā€ÆPM
signed...bkm saidā€¦
three pieces - all enlightening each unique...the third is my favourite...bkm
April 12, 2011 at 12:02ā€ÆAM
Anonymous saidā€¦
As above so below and welcome to mystic territory - our quest is alawys for enlightenment. As I think you know, I'm a huge fan of what you're talking about with these gem poems. I can see how they weave around the theme and love that each poem can work either seperately or togegther. For the first one, it's a fine jig of an elemental dance you've constructed, and I have a sense of a process of the elements rising from the din so they can win. 'Silver ~ Air Bender' is just a lovely line by itself. So, elements winning, the witch connects with her power source an that is always silence. To me, the third poem describes nothing but evolution, with the outside lines flowing from the center two. Look out how the last line in each one connects! Beautiful and uplifting!
April 12, 2011 at 8:23ā€ÆAM
Anonymous saidā€¦
Not familiar with the form, but I like the poem. No crows though.
April 12, 2011 at 8:09ā€ÆPM
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