The Problem with Observation

Today at Onestop Poetry's Form Monday, Joy Ann Jones  is treating us to a bit of free verse poetry.  Her article is fantastic, and her work is amazing!  While my own offering will not hold a candle to many of the sincere talents that can be found at Onestop, I present to you...

The Problem with Observation

When I assumed this role
I thought perhaps there would be room for me.
Sticking to these contractual obligations
Is proving more difficult than I had anticipated,
and perhaps I should have paid closer attention
to the fine print;

I was not informed my position came with a gag order.
I was not told that though I would be using my voice,
my opinion could not be included.
I didn't know that action would be sacrificed as proof
and that I would have to be willing to stop living my own life...
to make a story out of yours.


 

Comments

Unknown saidā€¦
always read the small print ! like this very much thank you
Anonymous saidā€¦
I feel the frustration conveyed in your words. You caught me and pulled me along. Thank You for sharing!
Unknown saidā€¦
Great free verse, this speaks strongly to a position of partnership that I recently exited. Your words articulate it beautifully, thank you for this one! ~ Rose
Brian Miller saidā€¦
wow. harsh reality...and i can feel the angst tash...two stories can blend well if one does not dominate...and losing my opinion, aint going to happen..smiles.
hedgewitch saidā€¦
This is great, Natasha. I love the in-your-face tone, the formal language conveying all the stiffness of emotion held in check. And of course, it is all done in a seamless free verse style that makes every word resonate. So glad you found the time to write and link up today. "...I was not told that though I would be using my voice,/my opinion could not be included...." love that, and man have I been there!
The Silver Fox saidā€¦
I've done a few writing projects in the role of "ghost writer," but I knew right up front that I was to write them as if I were the client, with his or her opinions, etc. Not letting the writer know this beforehand is inexcusable.
Anonymous saidā€¦
Sad that we don't know what we're letting ourselves in for sometimes. Loved the thought behind this poem Tash, always walk the path with your eyes open! :D
Pat Hatt saidā€¦
So true, especailly around a certain ummm "place"..lol....really in your face too, which most that create this crap deserve
signed...bkm saidā€¦
Well said, so often an agreement is a gag order for one in a relationship...to ensure the other gets the glory....not good for any relationship ...usually its downfall....bkm
Beachanny saidā€¦
You captured exactly my feelings when working in a law office. It was great at times, but when I had to sit on my opinions regarding some issues, I felt as though I'd been betrayed from the start. Well done with tone and language...and all the things Joy said. I loved it too. Gay
Adam Common, Poet saidā€¦
Great poem. Thank you so much for adding my banner to your blog :D Much appreciated :D
Anonymous saidā€¦
Wow, that was good. sounds a bit emotional though.
mark saidā€¦
The first verse has a marvelous cadence to it. The truth of the poem is enhanced by the truth in the making of the poem.

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