In Passing ~ #poetry by @Tashtoo
In Passing
Who knew that death could smell so sweet
Displayed on asphalt, August heat
No rose could hide that sickening scent
No carnation could prevent
This air that rises, a petal’s rot
Where maggots crawl through flowerpots
And soil rises up to feed
Bringing beetles and centipedes
Life force spilled against the grey
A crimson stain on life’s highway
Where machines bring hammers down
Divine plans at once turned round.
Invaded by the mind’s design
The end of breath, a lost bloodline
Taken down at peak of life
The mind of man cuts like a knife
And upon the rot in blackened eyes
The cutting scythe will claim its prize
A vessel of souls called back too soon
Dissolving now in death’s cocoon
Back to the Earth she has been called
Though now on asphalt she lies sprawled
Upon the dust of histories
Wrapped round life’s dark mysteries.
Who knew that death could smell so sweet
The loss of life, upon soul’s retreat
And trigger thoughts of awful things
This is the stuff that death does bring.
Comments
To ruin your rhyming and rhythm fun
As I do it all the friggin time
Never fear you didn't commit a crime
So nope I won't hold it against you
As everyone should write how they want, so true
Although I see you turned the light off once more
As you took this tour
Going a bit to your dark side
I'll take your word for it on the smelling sweet stride
Always enjoy these writes
Even the death flights
And now this has gotten long
The face it facts are no matter what you choose you can do no wrong.
my fav stanza in your fine poem is..
Life force spilled against the grey
A crimson stain on life’s highway
Where machines bring hammers down
Divine plans at once turned round
What an arresting first line Natasha. It hooked me instantly and drew me into the heart of this skilfully rhymed and intensely evocative poem. Some truly inspirational imagery here. Hugs, James.
~Kelvin
Blue ribbon: And upon the rot in blackened eyes
The cutting scythe will claim its prize
A vessel of souls called back too soon
Dissolving now in death’s cocoon
Great stuff. See u tonight:)
Who knew that death could smell so sweet
I'm thinkin' you did the rhymes exceptionally well, Natasha, in addition to the spooky ack-ness of the death theme.
Lovely verse, good depth and I agree with some of the other, 'who knew that death could smell so sweet' is a great line.
Beth
"Who knew that death could smell so sweet"
REALLY haunting! more vivid imagery than i would have expected possible in a poem. {smile} rhyming or not, your writing is amazing!
dani ♥
Poor cat! I have 12 and feed 9 more strays down the road, because the people there are ignorant and don't care.
Poor kittie! At least you, tashtoo, have a heart and a conscience. And are a lovely, lovey poet.
I would say enjoyed greatly, but the poor kittie.
Lady Nyo
What a great line! This is excellent.
Thankyou for your comments on my blog - i always look forward to reading them. It makes all the effort worthwhile - thanks tash
Props
that line.... oh yeah
As for dark subject matter, it seems to be the theme this week!
Wrapped round life’s dark mysteries."
Yes, indeed, Natasha! A very deep piece. So much written and so much written between the lines.
For most Westerner's, death is a topic that lies beyond the fringe. I am so glad you brought it out for people to view and think about.
The ancients, in their wisdom, knew that this present physical life is merely one of many, that takes us along the pathless path from life to life.
Thank you for sharing. Perhaps it will wake a few up...or perhaps, get a few to think more deeply on what life, and death may be.
Roger ☺
The ancients all spoke of many lives, many experiences, and
"Back to the Earth she has been called
Though now on asphalt she lies sprawled
Upon the dust of histories
Wrapped round life’s dark mysteries."
dark, deep and well done Miss Tasha!!
It does sound tragic - the incident with the cat...
I didn't get a chance to read all the comments.... This time. I'll have to come back - I like visiting your blog anyway, everyday.
It's hard on the iPad to go up and down to revisit and copy your lines...
Accept my sincere appologies.
I think you are FAB!!!
Thanks for dropping by my page..
Gene
Fascinating!!!